I thought this one was okay. It seemed slow-moving but, given the theme and the fact that it was descriptive in nature more than it was active, that's understandable. Although, at times, it was too descriptive (ex: describing the doctor's set jaw and furrowed brow; the mother with her arms out, palms facing the daughter). The language, at times, sounded less like what a person would actually say or think but a narrative ostensibly required to paint a picture in the radio listener's mind. Basically, I think she talked too much. 

The doctor didn't seem all that great. It sounded like she had cancer? At any rate, she was dying and then, because she opened her eyes, he pronounced that she was going to be okay? Why? Wasn't she just as sick as before she went on her little trip?
Overall, I wondered if it was perhaps supposed to pack more of an emotional, thoughtful punch than it did or if it was basically intended just to say "here's one interpretation of astral projection."